Regret Less, More Satisfaction
Everyone sets up a goal or resolution at the beginning of the New Year. I personally think it is very cliché, but I, myself am not an exception. I once heard someone say that goes along the lines of “You can always spend money and earn it again, but once you spend time, you’re not getting that back.” So at the beginning of this year, I set up a huge lifetime promise to myself. I thought, since I’m done with my teen years, it’s time to grow up. I promised myself that I will enjoy whatever is in the present, try to make the best choices, and not regret the choices I make.
In the past, I would usually make a choice and regret it horribly. I have always enjoyed being around the presence of my friends. One time, I followed my friends to the movies and it turned out to be an incredibly boring experience. When I arrived, half the group weren’t even my friends. I didn’t even talk; I just watched the movie and went home. I regretted it at that very moment. I kept thinking, “Wow. I could have done some of my homework and play games at home. I could have even just called my best friend to pick me up and have dinner.” Simple and childish things like this made me regret a lot in high school, but in college, things were different.
It was just last year when I became a freshman in college. Things were different because I was in a totally different social culture and atmosphere from high school. I was also legal enough to drink. The mixture of being drunk and having good company does not make me want to go home. So, what I'd often do was spend the night at school. I would drink until around 2 or 3 a.m. and sleep until 6 or 7 a.m., then go home. I would regret this all the time because, usually when the gathering lasts that long, people get tired and become much quieter. It doesn't get any more fun, and I always have to sleep alone in my department's lounge room. Sure, I was enjoying what's going on in the present, but I didn't make the right choice and regretted it right then.
So far this year, I'm getting better at making a right call in those tempting decisions, haven't regretted those decisions too much, and totally am enjoying whatever is happening around me. There hasn't been much to make choices about since the school year has only started. Still, I'm confident that I'll improve as a person, and become a more careful decision maker.
To. Seon Hyuk Im / From. Daewon Shin / Assignment no.1
ReplyDelete1.What I like about this piece of writing is every sentence in the paragraphs is so simple and clear that I could go through the whole writing easily not getting bored.
2. Your main point seems to be that you've been trying to be a good decision maker not to regret after doing something but feel more satisfaction, and you're getting better now.
3. A sentence I found out powerful is “You can always spend money and earn it again, but once you spend time, you’re not getting that back.” This quoted sentence showed the reason why your lifetime promise got started, which is important as a starter.
4. Something that isn't that much clear to me is the reason you compared your teenager life and university life. It doesn't seem to be differnt situations from each other in the point of regret.
5. The one you could make thatwould make the biggest improvement in this peice of writing is write two body paragraphs not using comprison. The last sentence of the first body paragraph makes it seem to be a comprarioson, but I don't think the way to write in you writing should be a comparioson.
To. Seon Hyuk Im / From. Hae Jin Jang / Assignment no.1
ReplyDelete1.What I liked about this piece of writing is that you've structured out the writing in a very simple way so that there were no confusions.
2. Your main point seems to be that you've decided to grow up and make wiser decisions in order to not regret the precious time you cannot get back once passed by.
3. The sentence I found powerful in your writing is, "So at the beginning of this year, I set up a huge lifetime promise to myself. I thought, since I’m done with my teen years, it’s time to grow up."
I liked those sentences because I could absolutely relate to it. Also, when you ended the sentence by saying, "it's time to grow up," it gave an impact on the reader who can refer to what you're talking about.
4. One thing that wasn't clear in my point of view is, "Simple and childish things like this made me regret a lot in high school, but in college, things were different." You said that things were different, however in the following paragraph you mainly wrote about what you did as a college freshman instead of explaining the contrast between high school and college.
5. The one thing your writing could improve on is maybe add a little more detail on how you're trying to change or the things you've tried so far about decision making and so on. I think this could help explain more about the situation.
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ReplyDeleteRegret Less, More Satisfaction
Everyone sets up a goal or resolution at the beginning of the New Year. I personally think it is very cliché, but I, myself am not an exception. I once heard someone say that goes along the lines of “You can always spend money and earn it again, but once you spend time, you’re not getting that back.” So at the beginning of this year, I set up a huge lifetime promise to myself. I thought, since I’m done with my teen years, it’s time to grow up. I promised myself that I will enjoy whatever is in the present, try to make the best choices, and not regret the choices I make.
In the past, I would usually make a choice and regret it horribly. I have always enjoyed being around the presence of my friends. One time, I followed my friends to the movies and it turned out to be an incredibly boring experience. When I arrived, half the group weren’t even my friends. I didn’t even talk; I just watched the movie and went home. I regretted it at that very moment. I kept thinking, “Wow. I could have done some of my homework and played games at home. I could have even just called my best friend to pick me up and have dinner.” Simple and childish things like this made me regret a lot in high school, but in college, things were different.
It was just last year when I became a freshman in college. Things were different because I was in a totally different social culture and atmosphere from high school. I was also legal enough to drink. The mixture of being drunk and having good company does not make me want to go home. So, what I'd often do was pull an all-nighter at school. I would drink until around 2 or 3 a.m. and sleep until 6 or 7 a.m., then go home. I would regret this all the time because, usually when the gathering lasts that long, people get tired and become much quieter. It doesn't get any more fun, and I always have to sleep alone in my department's lounge room. Sure, I was enjoying what's going on in the present, but I didn't make the right choice and regretted it right then.
So far this year, I'm getting better at making a right call in those tempting decisions, haven't regretted those decisions too much, and totally am enjoying whatever is happening around me. There hasn't been much to make choices about since the school year has only started. Still, I'm confident that I'll improve as a person, and become a more careful decision maker.