Tuesday, June 3, 2014

Seon Hyuk Im / Assignment 6 / Tuesday 11am

Keep It As a Dream

           "Mommy, I want to become a firefighter!" "Mama, I want to become a policeman!" When everyone was merely a child, these are words that you often hear from them. Children are very simple minded. However, when one grows older and older, he/she start to get an idea of what they want to do; we call this our "dream" job. A dream job is what one wants to do as a career; earning money while at the same time, enjoying it. I had a dream job. I wanted to become a soccer player. At the time, it seemed possible. But this time, it's impossible.

           When I was younger, I played soccer every day. I was addicted. I wanted to keep running and kick balls around. I stood as one of the best player in middle school and led my school to being second place. It was the best feeling; a feeling of accomplishment, a feeling of happiness, a feeling of improvement. I felt great because I've established myself as a key member, and drove my team into one of the top teams. I felt happy because I felt accomplished, and my efforts paid off. I felt I've became a much better player game after game, improving my skills in the game. But thing started changing after coming into high school. Things always change over time.

           People get older, people change. When teenagers get older, they grow. I didn't think teens would grow that fast because, I certainly didn't. When I got older, I lacked the physical to compete any more with others. I lacked the stamina to last a whole match. I lacked the speed to keep up with others. These physical insufficiencies made me a much invaluable and useless player. For the rest of my high school days, I was kept on the bench, where back up players, where unwanted players belong. I tried to improve, I practiced harder and harder. It just didn't cut it.

           My effort didn't pay off, and I started to lose confidence as well as my will to keep trying. By the end of my high school years, I had quit the team; never to go back. I promised myself I would just enjoy soccer as a hobby, and I did. I rather chose to become a supporter and helper of the team. That way, I can enjoy playing soccer, yet get no stress at all. I also started playing 'futsal' or indoor soccer with the coach and others who just enjoy playing soccer. It was a much better lifestyle, a much less stressful life.

           In conclusion, I don't qualify for my dream job because I lack the physical characteristics and strong will to keep pushing myself, to keep trying. Overall I lack both physically and mentally to thrive as a soccer player we all see on TV. I'll just enjoy it as a hobby, watch it on TV, and play games of soccer.

1 comment:

  1. Hi!
    I enjoyed reading about your dream job! Here are my comments :)
    1. Yes, the introduction includes background information about the topic.
    2. Yes, the thesis statement has a unifying principle. You wanted to be a soccer player. You thought it was possible in the past, but now, you think it's not.
    3. Yes, each body paragraph include a distinct category.
    a. Being the best football player in school
    b. Physical insufficiencies in becoming a soccer player
    c. Enjoy soccer as hobby

    4. Yes, the supporting details for each paragraph are sufficient.

    5. No, the conclusion does not restate the first category. However, it restates the second and the third paragraph.

    6. The conclusion includes a self-evaluation.

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