Effects of the Great Depression
The Great Depression was a tragic worldwide economic devastation. The time it started varied from different regions, but in most countries it started in the 1930s. It was a period of time where the world was faced with the longest, most unfortunate, and widespread depression in the 20th century. Although there were countless effects due to this unfortunate event, the three basic effects were mass migration, unemployment, and bad health.
Due to the harsh circumstances during the time of the Great Depression, a big population moved to other places. Rural New England and upstate New York lost a big number of citizens who were seeking rare opportunities somewhere else. Also, the Great Plains lost population to places like California and Arizona. Many of the migrants were people who had a family to take responsibility for. Over 600,000 people were caught hitchhiking rides on trains trying to move.
The rise of unemployment rate was a very big issue during the Great Depression. The people who lost their jobs could not afford to feed themselves, pay their rent, and support their family. It was especially a very stressful period for men because when men lost their jobs they were very ashamed of themselves and they felt like their status had fallen. Since someone needed to afford the cost of living in the family, when men were jobless, the children or women went out to search for jobs. However women were often fired when the employer found out she was married. Women were known for taking jobs away from men.
Health was also an important factor back then. Health care in general was not an open choice for everybody. Alcoholism and smoking cigarettes increased with people seeking to escape from reality. Malnutrition was very serious matter as well. Since people could not afford proper nutrition, more and more people suffered due to not enough nutrition. And being unable to afford to eat properly also lead to the rise of crime rates, doing whatever it take to live. Suicide rate also increased during the time.
The Great Depression was a period of time full of devastation and frustration for many people around the world. Effects like migration, unemployment, and bad health were a big issue people during the period had faced. People were filled with depression and hope was nowhere to be found. Some economies started to recover by the mid 1930s however most countries suffered the negative outcome of the Great Depression that lasted until after the end of World War II.
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ReplyDelete1. Yes the introduction includes a general thesis about the causes and effect. Although there were countless effects due to this unfortunate event, the three basic effects were mass migration, unemployment, and bad health. It clearly states the three major effects of the Great Depression.
2. Yes, each body paragraph includes a topic sentence and each topic specifies a cause.
Body 1- Due to the harsh circumstances during the time of the Great Depression, a big population moved to other places.
Body 2- The rise of unemployment rate was a very big issue during the Great Depression.
Body 3- Health was also an important factor back then. Health care in general was not an open choice for everybody.
3. Yes the essay clearly shows how the great depression led to certain events and phenomena.
4. The writer used connectors like 'since.' But it would be better if he/she used more of it.
5. Yes the conclusion sums up the main ideas by saying "Effects like migration, unemployment, and bad health were a big issue people during the period had faced."
6. No, this essay doesn't include writer's own evaluation or reflection.
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ReplyDelete1. Does the introduction include a general thesis about the causes and effect? Underline this statement.
- Although there were countless effects due to this unfortunate event, the three basic effects were mass migration, unemployment, and bad health.
2. Does each body paragraph contain a topic sentence that defines a specific cause?
- This writing is about the effects of the Great Depression so there is no defined causes.
3. Are the causes explained in a logical way?
- The effects are generally well connected with the cause, the Great Depression. Body paragraph 1 shows the Great Depression made people move to other place to seek other rare chances. But in the second paragraph I cannot find any line which shows how the Great Depression affected people to become jobless. In the last body paragraph the reason why people were in a bad health condition.
4. Does the writer use connectors to show cause and effect?
- She used 'As well, And' and so forth as connectors to show cause and effect.
5. Does the conclusion restate the cause?
- Effects like migration, unemployment, and bad health were a big issue people during the period had faced.
6. Is there an evaluation or a reflection in the conclusion? Write it here.
- No. The essay does not show any reflection or evaluation.
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ReplyDelete1. Yes the introduction has an thesis statement. The thesis statement is ' Although there were countless effects due to this unfortunate event, the three basic effects were mass migration, unemployment, and bad health. It clearly states the three major effects of the Great Depression'
2. Yes each body paragraph has its topic sentence. They are 'Due to the harsh circumstances during the time of the Great Depression, a big population moved to other places.
Body', 'The rise of unemployment rate was a very big issue during the Great Depression.
Body' and 'Health was also an important factor back then. Health care in general was not an open choice for everybody'
3. Yes the author explains the effects of the Great Depression in a logical way by giving specific numbers and examples.
4. The author uses the connector 'since' to show the cause and effecy relation between sentences.
5. The conclusion restates the thesis statement in the following sentence: Effects like migration, unemployment, and bad health were a big issue people during the period had faced.
6. I believe the author shows her evaluation of the great depression in the sentence 'The Great Depression was a period of time full of devastation and frustration for many people around the world'
Effects of the Great Depression
ReplyDeleteThe Great Depression was a tragic worldwide economic devastation. The time it started varied from different regions, but in most countries it started in the 1930s. It was a period of time where the world was faced with the longest, most unfortunate, and widespread depression in the 20th century. Although there were countless effects due to this unfortunate event, the three basic effects were mass migration, unemployment, and bad health.
Due to the harsh circumstances during the time of the Great Depression, a big population moved to other places. Rural New England and upstate New York lost a big number of citizens who were seeking rare opportunities somewhere else. Also, the Great Plains lost population to places like California and Arizona. Many of the migrants were people who had a family to take responsibility for. Over 600,000 people were caught hitchhiking rides on trains trying to move.
The rise of unemployment rate was a very big issue during the Great Depression. The people who lost their jobs could not afford to feed themselves, pay their rent, and support their family. It was especially a very stressful period for men because when men lost their jobs they were very ashamed of themselves and they felt like their status had fallen. Since someone needed to afford the cost of living in the family, when men were jobless, the children or women went out to search for jobs. However women were often fired when the employer found out she was married. Women were known for taking jobs away from men.
Health was also an important factor back then. Health care in general was not an open choice for everybody. Alcoholism and smoking cigarettes increased with people seeking to escape from reality. Malnutrition was a very serious matter as well. Since people could not afford proper nutrition, more and more people suffered due to not enough nutrition. And being unable to afford to eat properly also lead to the rise of crime rates, doing whatever it took to survive. Suicide rate also increased during the time.
The Great Depression was a period of time filled with devastation and frustration for many people around the world. Effects like migration, unemployment, and bad health were a big issue people during the period had faced. People were filled with depression and hope was nowhere to be found. Some economies started to recover by the mid 1930s however most countries suffered the negative outcome of the Great Depression that lasted until after the end of World War II.