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Naeun Kang
Kievan Rus' the Acceptance of the Greek Orthodox Church was a double-edged sword
When you think of Russia, what word do you come up with? You will probably answer "Vodka" since many people do. As lots of people already know, many Russian people enjoy drinking. Do you know the fact that when Kievan Rus, the early Russia, chose a state religion, the culture of enjoying alcoholic drinks affects to the decision? Vladimir the great felt the necessity of the state religion and considered several religions including Islam, the Greek Orthodox Church and Catholic Church. However, he chose the Greek Orthodox Church. There was no known exact reason why he excluded Catholic, but the reason why the Islam was excluded was the religion did not allow drinking. So he said Russian people could not live without the joy of drinking. As the result, the Greek Orthodox Church became the state religion in Kievan Rus. Then, what is the reason why the Greek Orthodox Church was accepted and which effects did it cause?
First of all, the reason why Vladimir decided to have a state religion was he saw the necessity of integrating nation. At that time, Kievan Rus' population comprised a wide variety of racial and ethnic groups because the geographic feature of an open field made other nations easy to access to Kievan Rus. So he needed one integrated national identity, and establishing the state religion was exactly effective way. Meanwhile, the reason why the Greek Orthodox was chosen as the state religion was because not only Islam was excluded as mentioned above, but also delegation from Kievan Rus was impressed to see Cathedral of St. Sophia and strongly recommended the religion to Vladimir. Then, after Kievan Rus accepted the Greek Orthodox Church, what did it affect to the society?
There were positive and negative effects, and at first, the positive one was the acceptance of the Greek Orthodox Church made it possible to accomplish cultural development. First of all, the Cyrillic alphabet, the original form of Russian Alphabet, spread and came into wide use. At that time, though there was no official language in the society, the Bible written with the Church Slavonic language, which was the Cyrillic characters, was supplied to the public and the alphabet could be spread and take root in the society. It also leaded to development of documentary literature such as a book <Primary Chronicle>, a history of Kievan Rus, which offered state identity. In addition, Byzantine culture was spread and developed in Kievan Rus such as icon, mosaic and architecture.
Next, the negative effect was Kievan Rus was disconnected from Western Europe. The two societies had an adversarial relationship because of the difference in religion. At that time, most of western European countries believed in the Roman Catholic Church. So they avoided to accept Kievan Rus as a member of European Countries. For this reason, Kievan Rus could not learn and go through the progress of civilizations in Western Europe, which let the Kiev society remain backwards until the time of Renaissance.
To sum up, the early Russia, Kievan Rus accepted the Greek Orthodox Church as the state religion to integrate diverse ethnic groups, and not only achieved the goal but also spread the Cyrillic alphabet and Byzantine culture. However, we can't ignore the negative effect of disconnection from Western Europe. So we should try to see the both effects rather than to see one side and conclude the acceptance of the religion was good or bad.
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ReplyDelete1. Yes it does have a general thesis: Then, what is the reason why the Greek orthodox Church was accpeted and which effects did it cause?
2. Each body paragraph contains a topic sentence: First of all, the reason why Vladimir decided to have a state religion was he saw the necessity of integrating nation; there were positive and negative effects, and at first, the positive one was the acceptance of the Greek orthodox Church made it possible to accomplish cultural development; next, the negative effect was Kievan Rus was disconnected from Western Europe.
3. The causes are well explained.
4. She used some connectors such as in addition, however and then.
5. The conclusion restates the causes.
6. The conclusion is that we should try to see the both effects rather than to see one side and conclude the acceptance of the religion was good or bad.
If I could give you one advice, I think your sentences are a bit too long. For example, your topic sentence for the second body paragraph. I think it would be better if you separate the sentences which would clarify the meaning! :)
Cause and Effect essay
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Naeun Kang
Kievan Rus’ the Acceptance of the Greek Orthodox Church was a double-edged sword
When you think of Russia, what word do you come up with? You may answer “Vodka” and many people do. As lots of people already may know, many Russian people enjoy drinking. Even when Kievan Rus, the early Russia, chose a state religion, the culture of enjoying alcoholic drinks affected to the decision. Vladimir the great felt the necessity of the state religion and considered several religions including Islam, the Greek Orthodox Church and Catholic Church. However, he excluded Islam because the religion did not allow drinking, with saying Russian people could not live without the joy of drinking. As the result, the Greek Orthodox Church became the state religion in Kievan Rus. Then, what caused Vladimir to accept the state religion and which effects did it cause?
First of all, the reason why Vladimir decided to have a state religion was he saw the necessity of integrating nation. At that time, Kievan Rus’ population comprised a wide variety of racial and ethnic groups. It was because the geographic feature of an open field made other nations easy to access to Kievan Rus. So he needed one national identity to integrate a multiracial society. Establishing the state religion was exactly effective way for it. Meanwhile, the reason why the Greek Orthodox was chosen as the state religion was because not only Islam was excluded as mentioned above, but also delegation from Kievan Rus was impressed to see Cathedral of St. Sophia. Then, after Kievan Rus accepted the Greek Orthodox Church, what did it affect to the society?
There were positive and negative effects. First of all, the positive one was a cultural development. For example, the Cyrillic alphabet, the original form of Russian Alphabet, spread and came into wide use. At that time, there was no official language in the society. The Bible was written with the Church Slavonic language, the Cyrillic characters, and supplied to the public. So the Cyrillic alphabet could be spread and take root in the society. It also leaded to the development of documentary literature such as a book , a history of Kievan Rus, which offered a state identity. In addition, Byzantine culture could be spread and developed in Kievan Rus such as icon, mosaic and architecture.
Next, the negative effect was disconnection from Western Europe. The two societies had an adversarial relationship because of the difference in religion. At that time, most of western European countries believed in the Roman Catholic Church. So they avoided to accept Kievan Rus as a member of European Countries. For this reason, Kievan Rus could not learn and go through the progress of civilizations in Western Europe, which let the Kiev society remain backwards until the time of Renaissance.
To sum up, the early Russia, Kievan Rus accepted the Greek Orthodox Church as the state religion to integrate diverse ethnic groups. It not only achieved the goal but also spread the Cyrillic alphabet and Byzantine culture. However, we can’t ignore the negative effect of disconnection from Western Europe. So we should try to see the both effects rather than to see one side and to judge if the acceptance of the religion was good or bad.
Kievan Rus’ the Acceptance of the Greek Orthodox Church was a Double-Edged Sword
ReplyDeleteAs lots of people already may know, many Russian people enjoy drinking. That’s because drinking is a good way to raise their body temperature to survive in cold area on high latitude. As time goes by, having alcoholic drinks for survive becomes culture. Even when Kievan Rus, the early Russia, chose a state religion, the culture of enjoying alcoholic drinks affected to the decision. Vladimir the Great, the king of Kievan Rus, felt the necessity of the state religion and considered several religions including Islam, the Greek Orthodox Church and Catholic Church. However, he excluded Islam that did not allow drinking; with saying Russian people could not live without the joy of drinking. As the result, the Greek Orthodox Church became the state religion in Kievan Rus. Then, what caused Vladimir to accept the state religion and which effects did it cause?
First of all, the reason why Vladimir decided to have a state religion was because he saw the necessity of integrating nation. At that time, Kievan Rus’ population comprised a wide variety of racial and ethnic groups. It was because the geographic feature of an open field made other nations easy to access to Kievan Rus. So he needed one national identity to integrate a multiracial society. Establishing the state religion was exactly effective way for it. Meanwhile, the reason why the Greek Orthodox was chosen as the state religion was because not only Islam was excluded as mentioned above, but also delegation from Kievan Rus was impressed to see Cathedral of St. Sophia. Then, after Kievan Rus accepted the Greek Orthodox Church, what did it affect to the society?
There were positive and negative effects. First of all, the positive one was a cultural development. For example, the Cyrillic alphabet, the original form of Russian Alphabet, spread and came into wide use. At that time, there was no official language in the society. The Bible was written with the Church Slavonic language, the Cyrillic characters, and supplied to the public. So the Cyrillic alphabet was spread and took a root in the society. It also leaded to the development of documentary literature such as a book , a history of Kievan Rus. In addition, Byzantine culture could be spread and developed in Kievan Rus such as icon, mosaic and architecture. We can find them until now in Russian church such as Cathedral of Basil the Blessed.
Next, the negative effect was disconnection from Western Europe. The two societies had an adversarial relationship because of the difference in religion. At that time, most of western European countries believed in the Roman Catholic Church. So they avoided to accept Kievan Rus as a member of European Countries. For this reason, Kievan Rus could not learn and go through the progress of civilizations in Western Europe, which let the Kiev society remain backwards until the time of Renaissance.
To sum up, the early Russia, Kievan Rus accepted the Greek Orthodox Church as the state religion to integrate diverse ethnic groups. It not only achieved the goal but also spread the Cyrillic alphabet and Byzantine culture. However, we can’t ignore the negative effect of disconnection from Western Europe. So we should try to see the both effects rather than to see one side and to judge if the acceptance of the religion was good or bad.