Rise France, rise
"Impossible is a word to be found only in the dictionary of fools." This famous quote has been said by the man who shaped modern France. Known for being a military and political genius, and his conquest of Europe, Napoleon Bonaparte was one of the most influential people of his time. He was a self made man born in a French colony and rose from one of the low ranks of the French army to ultimately becoming the Emperor of France. Bonaparte's contribution has not only been limited to France but to the entire world.
The story of the Emperor of France is quite remarkable. Napoleon Bonaparte, the son of Carlo Buonaparte, a Corsican attorney and politican and Letizia Ramolino, was born in the French colony of Corsica on August 15, 1768. At the age of ten Napoleon was sent to a military boarding school called Brienne-le-Château in Paris. Napoleon was constantly teased by his classmates for being small, and for having a thick Corsican accent. Despite the harsh treatment he got from his friends, the young Bonaparte showed signs of the great person he would one day become. As a boy he would organize complex strategies in snowball fights and excelled in his studies. Upon graduation he spent a few years in the French army, and as the French revolution broke out he returned home to Corsica. Napoleon Bonaparte received the help of a fellow Corsican and as a result, he was able to re-enter the French army and proved himself worth by his victories. Soon, Bonaparte scaled up the ranks to the highest point.
Napoleon Bonaparte was not only a good military leader but also a good administrator. France had suffered the heavy consequences of the revolutionary turmoil by 1799, as a result it made the government unstable and corrupt. Even the Christian laws that brought Europe together during the Dark Ages were unpopular, as it made France's inflation worse. The French were desperate for a more stable government that would make their lives more secure. Napoleon Bonaparte was able to seize this opportunity to become the ultimate ruler. One of his main accomplishments as a ruler was the establishment of the Napoleonic Civil Law Codes, which made all men equal under the law. At least all men were equally under his power, despite their ethnicity, or social status. Consequently Napoleon used the notion of equality to gain popularity and stay in power.
The legacy of Napoleon is smeared in to the lives of the modern people. Despite the negative opinions people have towards him for being a dictator, he was able to positively contribute to France and the rest of the world. The main driving force behind the French revolution was the poor economic status. When Napoleon came to power, he was able to bail France out of poverty. He carried out a series of reform that concluded to fair taxes, increased trade, development of French luxury industries, improved infrastructure, and a central bank to control monetary policy. Napoleon reformed the education system, to create a middle-class cadre of leaders. He founded primary schools, created a new elite system of secondary schools, and established many other schools for the formerly bourgeoisie. Bonaparte also promoted education for girls and greatly improved teacher training. Literacy levels in France shot through the roof under Napoleon's regime. The current school system the majority of the world follows was modeled after Napoleon's education reform.
From a teased Corsican in Paris to the most powerful man in Europe, Napoleon Bonaparte positively contributed to his country and the world. Despite some of the questionable actions Bonaparte took, his achievements and determination eventually named him one of the greatest men to ever live.
To. Tae-hwan Park From.So-eun Yoon
ReplyDeleteHello, Tae-hwan.
I enjoyed reading your essay.
To me, your essay felt like a lecture given by a French history professor.
But I think you missed out on the most important task of this assignment, which was to write a cause-and-effect essay.
So here is my feedback.
1. No, you do not include a general thesis about the causes and effects of Napoleon's great accomplishments in your introduction.
2. Your first body paragraph is entirely composed of Napoleon's story as an ordinary child who grew up to be a great leader. It does not include a topic sentence that defines a specific cause. Your second and third body paragraphs also lack a clear topic sentence indicating a cause-and-effect essay.
3. No, not really. I am still not sure what caused Napoleon to dream of achieving such great accomplishments.
4. No, you have not included sufficient amount of connectors to show cause and effect.
5. No, your conclusion does not restate the causes,because you have not mentioned them in the introduction either.
6. There is an evaluation.
"Despite some of the questionable actions Bonaparte took, his achievements and determination eventually named him one of the greatest men to ever live."
Hwan, I really liked your essay, but I think you need to work on the organization of this essay to indicate that it is a cause and effect essay.
I will see you next week. Bye:)
To Tae Hwan from Hae Sook.
ReplyDelete1. No. If the thesis showed what exactly the contributions of Bonaparte were, it'd be a clear general thesis of cause and effect essay.
2. No.
3.No. It'd be much easier both for the readers and the writer if it's written about what effect Napoleon had
4. I see some connectors but not really sure those are to show cause and effect.
5. Yes, maybe... But it needs to be specific. For the conclusion to be more specific, the whole essay needs to be specific.
6. Yes. Despite some of the questionable actions Bonaparte took, his achievements and determination eventually named him one of the greatest men to ever live.
Great Napoleon
ReplyDelete"Impossible is a word to be found only in the dictionary of fools." This famous quote has been said by the man who shaped modern France. Known for being a military and political genius, Napoleon Bonaparte was one of the most influential people of his time. Born as a minority in a French colony, he rose from one of the lowest ranks of the French army to ultimately becoming the Emperor of France. Although Bonaparte's life was short lived his achievements has left an everlasting effect, not only to his country but to the entire world in terms of equality, knowledge revival, and education.
For the first time in history Napoleon Bonaparte brought the very notion of the equality of men into action. After being crowned the Emperor of France Bonaparte replaced the irrational feudal law, and introduced a set of sound laws, that is known as the Napoleonic Code. The code forbade privileges based on birth, such as royalty. Under the Napoleonic code every man despite his or her social hierarchy was equal, thus everybody had to pay taxes and was given equal chances upon the distribution of civil jobs. This code heavily influenced the legal system of within the span of pan-European countries and the United States. As the ultimate result every country influenced by the prevalent German, French, or American legal system can concluded that Bonaparte’s contribution impacted them to a certain extent.
Bonaparte’s obsession of knowledge has resulted to significant recovery of lost information. During the Bonaparte’s conquest of Europe and parts of Africa, he commissioned a group of professionals in areas of: science, engineering, and language called the Commission des Sciences et des Arts to recover valuable artifacts to further enhance the knowledge that the French Empire kept. Hieroglyphics had been lost ever since the Islamic conquest of the Middle East, however the Commission des Sciences et des Arts recovered a priceless stone tablet now known as the Rosetta Stone, that deciphered hieroglyphics. As a result to Bonaparte’s greed of knowledge the world has once again been reunited to the lost language of ancient Egypt.
Napoleon Bonaparte profoundly believed that a good education was the key to success in France. After the abolishment of royalty, Bonaparte’s mission was to create a firm middle class to be the crucial supporting pillars of France. Consequently Bonaparte made an agreement with the Pope to reestablish most of the parochial schools, which at that time made up most of the schools in France. After the concordant with the Pope and Bonaparte deprived most of the religious notions and replaced them with patriotism, and morals. Bonaparte strived for the importance of practical knowledge rather than religious, and therefore under his educational reform the schools focused on science, literature, philosophy, and military knowledge. Additionally the girls attending school was widely practiced. The reform has influenced the propose and structure of today’s schools, and thus there is an elementary and secondary education.
Despite the negative opinions people have towards Napoleon Bonaparte for being a dictator, his achievements has positively impacted both France and the world in equality, knowledge revival, and education in today’s world. The legacy that this man has left on the face of the earth defiantly earns him a spot as one of the greatest people to ever live.
Napoleon’s contributions to the world
ReplyDelete"Impossible is a word to be found only in the dictionary of fools." This famous quote has been said by the man who shaped modern France. Known for being a military and political genius, Napoleon Bonaparte was one of the most influential people of his time. Born in a French colony, he rose from one of the lowest ranks of the French army to ultimately becoming the Emperor of France. Although Bonaparte's life was short lived his achievements has left an everlasting effect, to his country but and to the entire world in terms of human equality, knowledge revival, and education reformation.
For the first time in history Napoleon Bonaparte was successful at implementing the idea of equality in all men. After being crowned the Emperor of France, Bonaparte replaced the irrational feudal law, and introduced a new set of sound laws, known as the Napoleonic Code. The code forbade privileges based on birth, such as royalty. Under the Napoleonic code every man despite his or her social hierarchy was equal, thus everybody had to pay taxes and was given equal chances upon the distribution of civil jobs. This code heavily influenced the legal system of within the wide span of pan-European countries and the United States. As a result, any country, influenced by the prevalent German, French, or American legal system can concluded that Bonaparte’s contribution impacted them to a certain extent.
Bonaparte’s obsession with knowledge has resulted to the recoveries lots of important lost information. During Bonaparte’s conquest of Europe and parts of Africa, he commissioned a group of professionals in areas of: science, engineering, and language called the Commission des Sciences et des Arts, to recover valuable artifacts to preserve, study, and further enhance the knowledge that the French Empire kept. The most famous rediscovery was the Egyptian hieroglyphics. Hieroglyphics had been lost ever since the Islamic conquest of the Egypt however the Commission des Sciences et des Arts recovered a priceless stone tablet now known as the Rosetta Stone, that deciphered hieroglyphics. Ultimately due to Bonaparte’s hunger of knowledge the world was able to reunited to the lost language of ancient Egypt.
Napoleon Bonaparte profoundly believed that a good education was the key to the success of France. After the abolishment of nobility in France, Bonaparte’s mission was to create a firm middle class to be the foundation of the French society and economy. During the 1800s, most of the schools in France were Christian parochial schools that only taught Christian monks and nuns. But, Bonaparte made an agreement with the Pope to re-establish those schools and open them to the common people. After the agreement, Bonaparte diverted the focus of the schools from religion and replaced them with patriotism, and morals. Consequently Bonaparte was able to nurture a middle class that valued the country than the church. Additionally, Bonaparte stressed the importance of practical knowledge rather than religious studies, and therefore under his educational reformation schools focused on science, literature, philosophy, and military knowledge. Even though during this time females were deprived from political power, Bonaparte encouraged women to be educated and in the first time in history, it was common to see women getting educated. Overall Napoleon’s reformation has influenced the purpose and structure of most of the modern schools today.
Despite the negative opinions people have towards Napoleon Bonaparte for being a dictator, his achievements has positively impacted both France and the world in human equality, knowledge revival, and education reformation. The legacy that this man has left on the face of the earth definitely earns him a spot as one of the greatest people to ever live.