Music Piracy- Why One Must Stand Up Against It
One of the most difficult challenges is standing up for what is right even when everyone else is not. As internet became readily available, illegal downloading and uploading of music became very popular and easy. In an effort to combat piracy, various music industries are suing file traders and the sites they download from. However, it is a challenge to track down everyone because there are thousands of people downloading everyday using various sites. Downloading illegal music is much like shoplifting a CD. This is crime and it should be prevented. I believe that penalties should be strengthened for music piracy because it is not only morally wrong, but it also affects the music industry and the legal buyers.
Music piracy is killing sales growth and profits for the music industry. According to RIAA (Recording Industry Association of America), it is estimated that the music industries lose $4.2 billion to piracy worldwide each year. This is because the more people can get music for free, the less they will buy. As a result, the paychecks of retailers, producers, musicians, song writers and recording engineers are all affected. For artists, since it is hard for them to make money from the sale of their music, they have to look for other means to earn money like touring.
Legal buyers are also affected by music piracy. They have to pay more to buy original CDs since the retail price has been raised to accommodate for the lower sales. This also affects those legal music buyers that purchase online. Record companies installed DMR - a technology that limits what people can do with the music that they buy - to prevent copying and file sharing in the songs they sell. Therefore, even if someone pays full price for a track, they might be limited in where and how much they can play that track. Music piracy should be banned because it is not right for the legal buyers to pay more money to make up for others illegal actions.
Some argue that people who listen to music are mostly teens and college students, a group that do not have a steady income. As a result, if they had to buy original CDs for every artist, they would not listen to music as much since the CDs are expensive. However, music piracy is downloading music without paying. It is like wearing a dress from a store and going out with paying for it. This is morally wrong because it is stealing. For low income consumers, there are many music applications for mobile phones these days where they can download music legally for a minimal price. Therefore students can still enjoy music at a low cost.
With more and more people pirating music, CDs are selling less; consequently, their retail price has been raised, making the legal buyers pay more to accommodate for the lower sales. Despite how easy downloading is, and despite the fact that so many people do it, the bottom line is that sharing music without copyright permission is illegal. It is also morally wrong because it is using someone else's property without their permission. Therefore, music piracy should be banned and efforts must be taken to combat it.
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ReplyDelete1. Yes, your essay have five paragraphs.
2. Yes, your essay includes a thesis statement that identifies your main point of view.
3. Your essay effectively expresses your own ideas regarding this topic. Each body paragraph includes a topic sentence that supports the main idea.
4. Yes, your essay includes a counter-argument.
5. Yes, all the minor details logically support your main idea.
6. Yes, you effectively summed up all the main points in the body part but you do not make a prediction or give a warning.
To Sharon Jeon from Yujin Lee
ReplyDeleteMusic Piracy- Why One Must Stand Up Against It
Hi, I really enjoyed reading your essay and let me give you my feedback^^!
1. There are five paragraphs in the essay.
2. There is a thesis statement that identifies the writer’s point of view: I believe that penalties should be strengthened for music piracy because it is not only morally wrong, but it also affects the music industry and the legal buyers.
3. The body paragraphs contain topic sentences which support the writer’s position. In the first body paragraph, the topic sentence is ‘Music piracy is killing sales growth and profits for the music industry.’ And in the second body paragraph, the topic sentence is ‘Legal buyers are also affected by music piracy.’ Also in the third body paragraph, I think the topic sentence is ‘(However, music piracy is downloading music without paying. It is like wearing a dress from a store and going out with paying for it.)This is morally wrong because it is stealing.’
4. In the third body paragraph, there is a counter-argument with a refutation: Some argue that people who listen to music are mostly teens and college students, a group that do not have a steady income.(…) However, music piracy is downloading music without paying.(…) This is morally wrong because it is stealing. For low income consumers, there are many music applications for mobile phones these days where they can download music legally for a minimal price. Therefore students can still enjoy music at a low cost.
5. The details in the body paragraph support reasons stated in the topic sentence. In the first body paragraph, the reason is ‘the bad impact on sales growth and profits for the music industry caused by music piracy’ and the details explain this reason: According to RIAA (Recording Industry Association of America), it is estimated that the music industries lose $4.2 billion to piracy worldwide each year. In the second body paragraph, the reason is ‘the impact on legal buyers’ and details demonstrate about the reason: Record companies installed DMR - a technology that limits what people can do with the music that they buy - to prevent copying and file sharing in the songs they sell. Therefore, even if someone pays full price for a track, they might be limited in where and how much they can play that track. Also in the third body paragraph, the reason is ‘the immorality of music piracy’ and details explain about this: For low income consumers, there are many music applications for mobile phones these days where they can download music legally for a minimal price. Therefore students can still enjoy music at a low cost.
6. In the conclusion, there is a part that restates the thesis: With more and more people pirating music, CDs are selling less; consequently, their retail price has been raised, making the legal buyers pay more to accommodate for the lower sales. (…) It is also morally wrong because it is using someone else's property without their permission. And a prediction is not included.
Thank you^^!
From Seung Hyun Kim to Sharon Jeon
ReplyDelete1.Yes, the essay has five paragraphs.
2. Yes, in the introduction, the writer states her point of view in the sentence, I believe that penalties should be strengthened for music piracy because it is not only morally wrong, but it also affects the music industry and the legal buyers.
3. Yes, each body paragraph includes a topic sentence to support the writer's position.
4. Yes, the third body paragraph contains a counter-argument. At first, she states the opposite side's point of view then refutes the idea logically.
5. Yes, in each body paragraph the writer present examples, similes, and logical explanations to support reasons stated in the topic sentences.
6. In the conclusion, the writer restates the thesis in different words.
Music Piracy- Why One Must Stand Up Against It
ReplyDeleteOne of the most difficult challenges is standing up for what is right even when everyone else is not. As internet became readily available, illegal downloading and uploading of music became very popular and easy. In an effort to combat piracy, various music industries are suing file traders and the sites they download from. However, it is a challenge to track everyone because there are thousands of people downloading everyday using various sites. Downloading illegal music is much like shoplifting a CD. This is crime and it should be prevented. I believe that penalties should be strengthened for music piracy because it is not only morally wrong, but it also affects the music industry and the legal buyers.
Music piracy is killing sales growth and profits for the music industry. According to RIAA (Recording Industry Association of America), it is estimated that the music industries lose $4.2 billion to piracy worldwide each year. This is because the more people can get music for free, the less they will buy. As a result, the paychecks of retailers, producers, musicians, song writers and recording engineers are all affected. For artists, since it is hard for them to make money from the sale of their music, they have to look for other means to earn money like touring.
Legal buyers are also affected by music piracy. They have to pay more to buy original CDs since the retail price has been raised to accommodate for the lower sales. This also affects those legal music buyers that purchase online. Record companies installed DMR - a technology that limits what people can do with the music that they buy - to prevent copying and file sharing in the songs they sell. Therefore, even if someone pays full price for a track, they might be limited in where and how much they can play that track. Music piracy should be banned because it is not right for the legal buyers to pay more money to make up for others illegal actions.
Some argue that people who listen to music are mostly teens and college students, a group that do not have a steady income. As a result, if they had to buy original CDs for every artist, they would not listen to music as much since the CDs are expensive. However, music piracy is downloading music without paying. It is like wearing a dress from a store and going out with paying for it. This is morally wrong because it is stealing. For low income consumers, there are many music applications for mobile phones these days where they can download music legally for a minimal price. Therefore students can still enjoy music at a low cost.
With more and more people pirating music, CDs are selling less; consequently, their retail price has been raised, making the legal buyers pay more to accommodate for the lower sales. Despite how easy downloading is, and despite the fact that so many people do it, the bottom line is that sharing music without copyright permission is illegal. It is also morally wrong because it is using someone else's property without their permission. Therefore, music piracy should be banned and efforts must be taken to combat it.