Intellectual property
When there were no internet, people used to buy CDs, albums and video tapes. However, as the world developed, people became able to use internet. And, CD players, LPs and etc. disappeared. Majority of people started to listen to music and watch videos on their cell phones. So most of them get their songs and videos on the internet for free. Some countries started to block all the websites that play videos and songs for free.
In Korea, artists complained about the music piracy that people get the music illegally. So they blocked all the sites that music can be played and downloaded for free such as, Grooveshark. They say downloading them for free are same as stealing foods and drinks from the convenient store. Some artists think downloading and sharing songs are same as the robbery. Artists say that their creations are meant to be sold not shared on the internet for free.
In some countries such as Indonesia think that music piracy is not a piracy. They do think songs and videos are creations but they think creations are meant to be spread for free and let everybody know. Even if music piracy is occurring frequently, famous artists such as Lil Wayne, Drake, Kanye and Eminem do not really care about the music piracy because they sell billions of albums every year. Some countries think that music and videos are part of art and they think these should be free not sold.
To sum up, as the world developed, people started to illegally download songs and videos on internet. Some countries such as, Korea think this is not right and blocked all the websites that plays songs and videos for free. However, there were countries that songs and videos are part of art and should be free.
To. Jung-yong Ko From. So-eun Yoon
ReplyDeleteHello JY Bro. I hope you are enjoying your long vacation.
So here is my feedback:)
1. No, your essay does not have five paragraphs. It only has four.
2. No, your essay does not have a thesis statement that identifies your main point of view.
3. This is supposed to be an argumentative essay giving your arguments about information technology, but your essay does not include your own position regarding this topic. Your body paragraphs do not include topic sentences that support your position.
4. No, you do not have a third body paragraph.
5. You do not have a topic sentence, so your supporting sentences don't seem to support anything, although they may be related.
6. Yes, you have summarized what you have said in the body paragraphs but you do not make a prediction or give a warning.
To. Jung-yong Ko From. Bak Taehwan
ReplyDelete1. No there are no 5 paragraphs.
2. Nope there is no thesis I can see.
3.Nope there is no topic sentence that supports the writers position.
4.NAW~~~ there is no 4th paragraph.
5.No the details do not support the topic sentences because there is no topic sentence.
6.No there is no thesis restated in different words in the conclusion because there is no thesis, and there is not prediction or issue the broader context.
To: Jung-yong Ko
ReplyDeleteFrom: Seon Hyuk Im
1. No.
2. No, I don't think I would consider that there is a thesis.
3. No, he's only providing information; not arguing.
4. Non-existent.
5. Not at all.
6. No, there is no thesis; he only sums up what he wrote in the essay.
Hi, this is Chaelim :D
ReplyDelete1. No, it has only four paragraphs.
2. I don't think this essay has a thesis statement.
3. he mentioned some informations about download of IP, but they dont' have topic sentences that support the writer's position.
4. No.
5. No, since there is no topic sentence, body paragraphs does not support any topic sentence.
6. He restated and sumed up the informations.