The Importance of Intellectual Property Rights
Without a doubt, the right to property is one of the most fundamental human rights and it assures one to have a general and exclusive entitlement to his private property. The right applies to not only tangible property but also intangible property such as writing, software, and music. In today's world overflowing with information and intellectual property, it is essential to protect one's right to his intellectual creation.
First and foremost, intellectual property rights promote new and further intellectual creation. Writers and musicians put efforts to create their works and corporations invest time and money to develop new technologies. However, were it not for intellectual property rights, such works and technologies would not be protected against copying and anyone can claim rights to other's creation. This would make the original creators' efforts and investments meaningless and discourage them from creating further intellectual property.
Some may argue that an individual or a corporation should not have an exclusive entitlement to intellectual property. One of their ideas is that unlike material property, intellectual property is not scarce. Thus, they argue, sharing it does not deprive the creator of his property but instead leads to public owning more property. Nevertheless, their argument is invalid. In a short term, people may seem to benefit from sharing intellectual property without giving acknowledgements to creators. However, as mentioned above, soon creators will be discouraged from creating at all and thus there will not be new intellectual property to share.
We live surrounded by others intellectual creations and yet we often do not acknowledge their efforts and investments to create them. We may benefit by illegal-downloading and piracy but, in fact, in a long run, it leads to a world without incentives to create any intellectual property. Thus, the protection of intellectual property rights is vital.
To. Seung-Hyun Kim From. So-eun Yoon
ReplyDeleteHello Seung-hyun, I hope you are enjoying your long holiday.
So here is my feedback:)
1. No, your essay only has four paragraphs.
2. Yes, in your introduction, you have included a very clear thesis statement that identifies your main point of view.
"In today's world overflowing with information and intellectual property, it is essential to protect one's right to his intellectual creation."
3. Your first body paragraph seems to have a very clear topic sentence, but your second boy paragraph does not have a topic sentence. It starts with a general statement. I think it would be better to include a topic sentence there.
4. Your second body paragraph, instead of your third one, contains a counter-argument.
5. Yes, the details logically support your main argument in the topic sentence.
6. Yes, you have restated your thesis in different words, but you have not made a prediction or given a warning.
Hello, Seung Hyun! I hope you've had a wonderful long holiday. Here is my feedback for you :)
ReplyDelete1. No, there are only four paragraphs.
2. Yes, the thesis statement is: " In today's world overflowing with information and intellectual property, it is essential to protect one's right to his intellectual creation."
3. The first body paragraph has a topic sentence: "First and foremost, intellectual property rights promote new and further intellectual creation." But your second paragraph doesn't really have one!
4. The second body paragraph has a counter argument: "Some may argue that an individual or a corporation should not have an exclusive entitlement to intellectual property." And there's a refutation too: "However, as mentioned above, soon creators will be discouraged from creating at all and thus there will not be new intellectual property to share."
5. Yes, the details do support reasons in the topic sntence.
6. Yes, the conclusion restates the thesis. And I think "in a long run, it leads to a world without incentives to create any intellectual property." makes a prediction.
The Importance of Intellectual Property Rights
ReplyDeleteWithout a doubt, the right to property is one of the most fundamental human rights and it assures one to have a general and exclusive entitlement to his private property. The right applies to not only tangible property but also intangible property such as writing, software, and music. In today’s world overflowing with information and intellectual property, it is essential to protect one’s right to his intellectual creation.
First and foremost, intellectual property rights promote new and further intellectual creation. Writers and musicians put efforts to create their works and corporations invest time and money to develop new technologies. However, were it not for intellectual property rights, such works and technologies would not be protected against illegal copying and anyone could claim rights to other’s creation. This would make the original creators’ efforts and investments meaningless and, in turn, discourage them from creating further intellectual property.
Also, it is socially important to protect intellectual property. Without the copyright protection, people would not be willing to share their creations for they do not receive credits for making them. Therefore, new ideas and technologies would not see the light of the day and one would have to invest efforts and money again to develop the same technologies. It leads to overlapping investments, which is a social loss.
Some may argue that an individual or a corporation should not have an exclusive entitlement to intellectual property. One of their ideas is that unlike material property, intellectual property is not scarce. Thus, they argue, sharing it does not deprive the creator of his property but instead leads to more property open to the public. Nevertheless, their argument is invalid. In a short term, people may seem to benefit from sharing intellectual property without giving acknowledgements to creators. However, as mentioned above, soon creators will be discouraged from creating at all and thus there will not be new intellectual property to share.
We live surrounded by others’ intellectual creations and yet we often do not acknowledge their efforts and investments to create them. We may temporarily benefit from illegal-downloading and piracy but, in fact, in a long run, it leads to a world without incentives to create any intellectual property. Thus, the protection of intellectual property rights is vital