The Inevitable and Unstoppable
We currently live in an era where many things are depended on electronics and internet. To be specific, many data are, and still being uploaded onto the internet. The data that are mainly being uploaded are documents, videos, music, and pictures. They may be in the form of torrents or just files. I'm sure four in five people, have downloaded these files or torrents. I'm not an exception. It's illegal, since it's a form of copying and downloading others' property that are copyrighted or patented. Though it is illegal, I think anyone shouldn't get in trouble for downloading and uploading onto the internet.
In this modern era, internet is a necessity. We need our smart phones and computers to do our work, and to communicate. However, we can also enjoy by watching videos, listening to music, and sharing photos. We have to download them onto our devices. We all download from a different source, a different provider. Almost everyone does this. The government can't go around arresting every single person who downloads, because it'd be a such tedious task, and it'd put more than half its nation's people in jail. Who'd be running the economy? Who'd be living in an empty country? Many problems like this will arise when so many people are in jail.
These days, it's hard to find yourself with some free time. It's hard to catch your favorite shows during the weekday, and it's hard to find time to catch a movie that you want to watch. That's where DVD and video stores come in, but in the modern era, it's faster to find yourself a torrent or file on the internet that you can download as soon as the movie releases its DVD, or after your favorite show has aired. It's free. All you need is internet. Download it, and after a few minutes or hours, the movie or show is yours. Many people do this. The people may be charged for downloading copyrighted files, but the cyber police cannot catch every single person who commits this crime. Again, it'd be tedious and many people would lose too much money, raising complaints around the country.
It may sound serious to some people, it may not. I believe there is no stopping to this however. The communities of sharing files online has become too large to control; cleaning this mess up will take a long time. There's too much people that upload mass files for people to download. More and more people are coming to use the internet as third world countries are also coming to the technological era rapidly. There is no solution, but to accept the fact that it cannot be stopped and less people will buy real products. Free and fast has become the trend to modern people.
In conclusion, uploading and downloading files online illegal cannot be stopped, so the government should stop pursuing for people that should be punished. As modern technology advances, so do the people's skills. More and more files will be uploaded, and less ways to prevent and slow down the process will be available. I support illegal downloading because it's free, fast, and convenient. It's common sense to rather download freely, than to find a store and buy the product. Who has the time to? Why settle for inconvenience when you can do everything in one sitting?
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1. yes the essay has five paragraphs
2. yes there is a thesis that states the writers point of view.
3. yes there is but the first paragraph's topic sentence is not strong for the point the writer is trying to prove.
4. yes there is a something that looks like a refutation, it only states the fact that nothing can be done, however it does not state anything thing got to do with the counter argument.
5.yes the details in the body paragraphs support reasons stated in the topic sentence.
6.no there is no thesis restated in different words or I just cant see them. There is a prediction.
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ReplyDeleteThe Inevitable and Unstoppable
We currently live in an era where many things are depended on electronics and internet. To be specific, many data are, and still being uploaded onto the internet. The data that are mainly being uploaded are documents, videos, music, and pictures. They may be in the form of torrents or just files. I'm sure four in five people, have downloaded these files or torrents. I'm not an exception. It's illegal, since it's a form of copying and downloading others' property that are copyrighted or patented. Though it is illegal, I don't think anyone should get in trouble for downloading and uploading onto the internet.
In this modern era, internet is a necessity. We need our smart phones and computers to do our work, and to communicate. However, we can also enjoy by watching videos, listening to music, and sharing photos. We have to download them onto our devices. We all download from a different source, a different provider. Almost everyone does this. The government can't go around arresting every single person who downloads, because it'd be a such tedious task, and it'd put more than half its nation's people in jail. Who'd be running the economy? Who'd be living in an empty country? Many problems like this will arise when so many people are in jail.
These days, it's hard to find yourself with some free time. It's hard to catch your favorite shows during the weekday, and it's hard to find time to catch a movie that you want to watch. That's where DVD and video stores come in, but in the modern era, it's faster to find yourself a torrent or file on the internet that you can download as soon as the movie releases its DVD, or after your favorite show has aired. It's free. All you need is internet. Download it, and after a few minutes or hours, the movie or show is yours. Many people do this. The people may be charged for downloading copyrighted files, but the cyber police cannot catch every single person who commits this crime. Again, it'd be tedious and many people would lose too much money, raising complaints around the country.
It may sound serious to some people, it may not. I believe there is no stopping to this however. The communities of sharing files online has become too large to control; cleaning this mess up will take a long time. There's too much people that upload mass files for people to download. More and more people are coming to use the internet as third world countries are also coming to the technological era rapidly. There is no solution, but to accept the fact that it cannot be stopped and less people will buy real products. Free and fast has become the trend to modern people.
In conclusion, punishment for uploading and downloading illegally is poinless. As modern technology advances, so do the people's skills. More and more files will be uploaded, and less ways to prevent and slow down the process will be available. I support illegal downloading because it's free, fast, and convenient. It's common sense to rather download freely, than to find a store and buy the product. Who has the time to? Why settle for inconvenience when you can do everything in one sitting?