Intellectual Property
The issue of intellectual property has been arisen at the same time with the advent of internet. Thanks to the internet, we can easily have access to enormous amount of information and various contents including movies, music and more. However, it also has facilitated an establishment of the new domain called "illegal downloading." People somehow penetrate through the walls that protect various contents on the internet and easily acquire them. Some people insist it violates the law of intellectual property, but I believe it depends on the originators whether the law applies to them or not.
The problem of intellectual property stems from the idea of creativity. Intellectual property rights was created because people did not like the idea of their "originality" or "creativity" being stolen by others. However, I believe no one has their own "originality" in that people are influenced and inspired by almost everything that surrounds them. It was their creativity that produced their work by fusing and adding and transforming different kinds of originalities. I'm not saying that the ideas are not creative and innovative, they are just not purely original. In that sense, people should get credit for being creative, not original.
Some musicians, movie makers, and writers "strongly" assert their intellectual property rights. This means that their productions are the means of making a living. I cannot say it is wrong for them to call out for their intellectual property rights because it is obvious to receive credit for making something creative. However, I believe they make "art" for money and their work was inspired by something else beforehand. I think true artists are those who merely enjoy having their work being watched or listened by others, and I know I can only say this because I am not an artist.
As I have mentioned above, people are inspired by their surroundings and everything they encounter. It helps people to build onto those inspirations that lead them to create such an innovative work. By letting people share everything they've created, it will allow us to meet a whole different world. Creative ideas and works will overflow with thousands of ideas shared and exchanged. However, this will only become possible only when the creators allow it to happen.
It is no longer the era of fighting over intellectual property rights on newly invented products, machines, technologies or whatsoever. If these are created in today's world, then they should be associated with the patent rights, not the intellectual rights. Also, as long as the creators do not care about their works to be used somehow by others, intellectual property rights should not be asserted. In order for the world to take a great leap towards more innovations, intellectual property rights should be weakened.
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From Daewon Shin To Do Hee Kim
ReplyDelete1. Yes, your essay has five paragraphs (introduction, three body paragraphs, conclusion)
2. Your essay has a clear thesis which is your argument. You believe intellectual property rights should be weakened for the word to take a great lead towards more innovations.
3. I'm not sure each paragraphs has strong argument connected with your argument through the whole essay. Body paragraphs might seem to be rather a grounds information for your main argument in Introduction and conclusion.
4. In each paragraph you showed a bit of counter argument.
5. Your supporting sentences support your topic sentences.
6. I'm not sure, but I think the conclusion is the strongest paragraph, not a simple summary.
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ReplyDeleteIntellectual Property
The issue of intellectual property has been arisen at the same time with the advent of internet. Thanks to the internet, we can easily have access to enormous amount of information and various contents including movies, music and more. However, it also has facilitated an establishment of the new domain called "illegal downloading." People somehow penetrate through the walls that protect various contents on the internet and easily acquire them. Some people insist it violates the law of intellectual property, but I believe it depends on the originators whether the law applies to them or not.
The problem of intellectual property stems from the idea of creativity. Intellectual property rights were created because people did not like the idea of their "originality" or "creativity" being stolen by others. However, I believe no one has their own "originality" in that people are influenced and inspired by almost everything that surrounds them. It was their creativity that produced the work by fusing and adding and transforming different kinds of originalities. I'm not saying that the ideas are not creative and innovative; they are just not purely original. In that sense, people should get credit for being creative, not original.
Because people are inspired by their surroundings and everything they encounter, it helps people to build onto those inspirations that lead them to create such an innovative work. By letting people share everything they've created, it will allow us to meet a whole different world. Creative ideas and works will overflow with thousands of ideas shared and exchanged. However, this will only become possible only when the creators allow it to happen.
It is no longer the era of fighting over intellectual property rights on newly invented products, machines, technologies or whatsoever. If these are created in today's world, then they should be associated with the patent rights, not the intellectual rights. Also, as long as the creators do not care about their works to be used somehow by others, intellectual property rights should not be asserted. In order for the world to take a great leap towards more innovations, intellectual property rights should be weakened.
For these reasons, I believe the intellectual property rights should no longer be applied to today’s society. Many people assert intellectual property rights because they want something in return for their productions of work, however, I can say that the work is not purely original; it is a production of creatively changing the works that have existed previously. If the work is original, then, as I have mentioned before, it should be in the hands of the patent rights’ issues. For an innovative world to come, intellectual property rights should be abolished.